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however
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child
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child
 lean the differénce between.right and wrongteachers and should
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 starting to buy other ne, punlsnment De in any way.cruel peopleo aller ones should Rather, teachers and parents canUse a variey ormenods to discgIpline.thei young charges,
such
 as detention, withdrawalo.privileges.angtime-out. Making the Punishment fit the crime is a usefulnoton, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean upgraffiti they have drawn, or apologise to someone they have hurt: In these waysresponsibility, is developed in the
child
. which leads to much better future behaviour. than does punishment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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