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people now have freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. do the advantage of this development outweigh the disadvantage?

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In today's life there is a more liberty for people to
work
 and live anywhere in the world due to the expansion of
communication
 technology and transportation. In recent
time
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times
 there is a trend of
work
 from home so, they can easily spend time with their family while doing the
work
. Here
this
 essay will discuss the pros.
and
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And
 cons.
of
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Of
 above statement. There are some reasons why development of the
communication
 is important nowadays.
Firstly
, people can do their
work
 from sitting any corner of the world.
using
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Using
 the wireless connection they can easily
communication
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communicate
 their boss and colleagues.
For example
, in the corona pandemic all employees are doing their
work
 from home easily without going outside the home.
Secondly
, by using public transportation people
reach
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to reach
 their destination in their time limit.
For example
, if a person
have
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has
 an urgent meeting in
delhi
a city in north central India
Delhi
 than by catching a flight from
surat
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Surat
 he can reach
their
objective case of they
them
 in 1 hour only.
On the other hand
, there is a drawback of
this
 advancement; like people become antisocial and lazy. It can affect their cognitive ability and can
leads
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lead
 health hazards; like increase in obesity, stress and
depresssion
a mental state characterized by a pessimistic sense of inadequacy and a despondent lack of activity
depression
depressions
.
For example
, people are more dependent on their
vehical
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
vehicles
 for nearby places. In the end, I firmly believe that there are more merits than demerits in the
communication
 technology and transportation.
However
, people should use
this
 technology in the limited amount and period.
Submitted by Yesha Mehta on

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