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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter •remind your employer what the course was about •explain why the course was useful to you in your work •suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear Mr. Jackson, I hope
this
 message finds you well. I am writing to provide feedback on the recent training course I attended on project management techniques. The course covered essential skills
such
 as effective planning, team communication, risk and crisis management. I found the training highly beneficial for my role, as it equipped me with new strategies to manage projects more efficiently. I learned how to prioritize tasks better and improve my collaboration with team members. Exactly,
this
 knowledge has already helped me streamline our current projects and enhance
overall
 productivity.
However
, I feel that
this
 course may not be suitable for some of my colleagues who are in more operational roles, as it is primarily focused on management skills. They might find it less relevant to their daily tasks, which centre around execution rather than planning and strategizing. Thank you for considering my feedback. Yours sincerely, Mohsen Ijbari
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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples of how the training has helped to illustrate your points further.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the flow between paragraphs is as smooth as possible for enhanced coherence.
task achievement
The letter clearly responds to all parts of the task prompt effectively.
task achievement
The use of appropriate formal language tone suits the context of addressing an employer.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph corresponds to a specific part of the task, maintaining a clear structure.
coherence cohesion
The use of greetings and closing adds a professional touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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