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Many cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solution can you suggest.

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It is clearly evident that most of the towns are facing a serious issue of housing facilities. The two main reasons for
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 problem is the growing number of establishments
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 as factories, industries and recreational facilities built nowadays, and the increase in
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. The plausible solution to
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 problem would be the allocation of specific residential regions by the government as well as campaigns for
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 control. The industrial revolution has had a great effect in today's housing conditions. More and more factories are being built to meet the needs of people.
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 has reduced the space for residential use in most cities.
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, in India, a survey depicted that, at least one house belonging to a family of four is being destroyed for the sake of various commercial facilities.
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,
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 growth has been a cause for the shortage of residential areas.
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, students from other countries make a long term visit,
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, for studies or research programs.
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 would urge the need of more and more houses to be built. An effective solution regarding
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 can be incorporated with the help of government by separating the areas into two, namely industrial and residential.
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 would create enough space and facilities for an industry and pupils would get appropriate living conditions. In conclusion,
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 growth and industrial development in most countries pave the way for shortage of houses.
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, governments can investigate and allocate suitable spaces so that both industrial and housing facilities can co-exist.
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