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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media is considered to be the most preferred source of information from all over the world. Whether it be about sports or the conference held in the United States, media make sure to cover every interesting topic and forward it to its viewers. But, over a period it has been seen that only the issues or any kind of emergencies are only covered by them rather than some evolutions that help in the growth of a
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. Media was considered to be a reliable source in an earlier period of time. Now, it seems that they have failed to uphold their reputation to
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 notion. New Channels these days are interested to project only the issues that the people or a
country
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 is facing and discuss about the facts and the numbers on the screen.
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, fire in amazon jungles did catch the attention of people and everyone did was just to talk about it and practically do nothing. Whereas, the reporters forget to cover about a lady to try to save kolas on her life.
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, like that lady, news people fail to cover the positive things in the
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 which helps in its social, economical and financial growth. They tend not to include the faces of
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 people who can actually bring a change and help in the evolution process of their
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.
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, a girl who was able to create reusable energy from the recycled products was not given the required name, which should have been, so that her invention can be used for the development in areas. I do agree with the notion to a great extent that news channels these days do not cover the issues which can help to make changes in people's life and create positive impact on everyone.
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, they focus much on the issues only happening around the world. Well, for a change may be they should start reconsidering their integrity towards their work and moral values to hold
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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