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Online shopping is becoming more common these days. What effect could this have on the environment and the types of jobs required?

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Recently, purchasing products via the internet has become increasingly favourable among people. While
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 rising tendency tends to generate upsides related to the environment and employment inclination,
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 subjectively advocate that in the long term, the benefits would transcendentally outweigh the drawbacks. Regarding the advantageous influences on the environment, thanks to the convenience of door-to-door delivery service, people no longer need to make journeys to the conventional stores which often restricts the traffic congestion and the amount of exhaust fumes released into the atmosphere.
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, since it is convenient to gain access to the online shops and buy products, it may lead to
overconsumption
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 which ends up in more landfills and a waste of resources. Even, in order to keep the goods untouched, the online stores usually Overpack these commodities with carton and plastic wraps which are sometimes non-biodegradable. Whereas, it
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 comes with several impacts on the patterns of recruiting employees. Chief among them is that, the growing ubiquity of online shops
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 means the rising demand of jobs in
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 field
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 as shippers, web designers and KOLs.
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, it would create thousands of job opportunities and become an incentive to the economic development.
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, some conventional retailers may encounter bankruptcy, prompting thousand of people to quit their jobs. In conclusion, online shopping spurs the environment and job market in the short run.
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, the positive effects derived from
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 tendency will be overshadowed by its adverse impacts in the long run.
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