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Some people think that children’s leisure activities should always be educational. Others think that it puts too much pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are a number of individuals, who assume that youngsters should spend their free time pursuing new knowledge.
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, their opponents argue that
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 particular lifestyle creates unnecessary pressure on children and stress them out. In
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 essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and
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 give my own opinion on the matter. On the one side,
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 activities as educational games, extra classes and lessons of music or art beneficial for a child’s development in terms of the improvement in their academic performances.
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, some parents, especially who came from a low-income environment believe that only dedication and hard work may bring success in life.
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, in my own childhood, I was constantly encouraged by the elderly to study because my parents were sure that only a degree would help me to succeed in life and it was out of the discussion.
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, there are serious objectives against constant educational processes of an upbringing child.
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, children, as well as adults, need to relax and take a rest after studies doing nothing important at all.
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, they would feel overwhelmed with different educational tasks and activities.
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, it could be the cause of depression, mood swings, lack of interest to the wards studying or even social interactions among the youngsters. Meanwhile, sufficient time for relaxation and rest reduces stress hormone level and increase feelings of happiness and fulfilment. In conclusion, both sides have their merits, but as far as I am concerned, I think it is important for parents to make sure that their child has a balance between educational activities and time for themselves.
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 way a child will grow up as a well-rounded and happy person, who is confident about their future lives.
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