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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In some of the countries, a group of people believes that make an investment in building new railway lines,
however
, others think that public
transportation
 should be developed. In my opinion, railway transports deserve more investment than public ones. Nowadays, timing is everything for all of us. People want to be right place at the right
time
;
therefore
, they prefer faster
travel
way
 rather than slow one. The subways have lots of stations, and they arrive there on the exact
time
. People who do not want to waste any of
time
 use
this
way
, because in
this
way
 you
also
 cannot encounter traffic congestion problems.
For instance
, when you go to a job interview, if you are late, it is really bad for your assessment. Companies consider that whether you can reach the job at the right
time
 or not.
Moreover
,
this
 type of
travel
 is
also
 chosen by undergraduate students, as in the universities pay attention students whether attended their lessons or not. People’s preferences should be considered. Railways are more comfortable and affordable than highway
transportation
. All passengers want to sit during their
travel
;
nevertheless
, most of them cannot sit, because it is not enough place for sitting on the buses.
On the other hand
, when people want to
travel
 by train, all of them have to buy a ticket, so all people can sit and
travel
 comfortable. In
this
 century, earning
money
 is very hard, that’s why people want to spend their
money
 for affordable things if they have a different option. Another public
transportation
 is travelling with their own car;
however
, cars’ prices and fuel costs are dramatically increased. These are other causes why spent much more
money
 for the railways. Considering all
this
, it is unwise to do investment for developing existing public transport. Railway
transportation
 is faster and more comfortable for people who prefer sitting.
Also
,
this
way
 is more affordable for people who do not have enough
money
. So, spending a large amount of
money
 on constructing new railways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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