Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. what is your opinion?

Intelligence
is
function
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a function
which has been evaluated since the beginning of the human being. It cannot be measured only in one way
(
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(
like amount of money
on
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in
bank account
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a bank account
the bank account
) it should be the sum of different points of view like wisdom, aids, which were reached during
life time period
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the life time period
, and style of life. Some people suggest that
intelligence
should be measured by
success
of
person
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people
, while others think that
this
is not the only way. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
partly agree with both sides of
discussion
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the discussion
and will prove you my point of view. Life
success
is something what can be reached without any
intelligence
. No need to be a highly educated to earn a lot of money or buy a new car, here only your attempts count and
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
wish to work really hard.
That Is
why
success
cannot be the tool of measurement of
intelligence
. It is quite obvious, that the smart person, or who has got an incredible level of development of the
intelligence
, will not show
this
to everybody, especially
by
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in
the way of demonstrating
for
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to
the world his expensive cars or yachts or something like that. Clever persons have other types of goals which they
want reach
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want to reach
. Some of them write the books, built something for new for the development of humanity or try to find the meaning of life. Anyway
,
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,
I totally against of process of measure of the
intelligence
by the
success
. Highly intellectual
people do
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people, do
not worry about
such
small thinks like money, their minds somewhere in space are busy
by
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with
the dreams about
galaxy
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galaxies
the galaxy
and their actions connect with something what concerned infinity.
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