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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, it is true that people have different sources to know the news all over the world,
such
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 as surfing on the Internet, watching TV, reading
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the newspaper
newspapers
a newspaper
. Some people believed that even Internet increasingly becomes an important channel for receiving
information
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, traditional
newspaper
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 still be the most major media for readers to gain the news. While there are some benefits from
newspaper
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, I believed that websites could widely expand the tunnel of gaining
information
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.
Firstly
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, people think that
newspaper
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 will remain the most important source of news is because of
this
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 form of communication could cover all groups of age, especially those older people who are inability of learning new technology.
For example
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, elder people do not know how to use the Internet access due to the difficulties of operating smartphones or computers and the font is too small for them.
Secondly
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, news from traditional paper media could represent the opinions of officials, so that a good communication bridge could build up between nations and governments.
Finally
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,
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newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
 could sell to the remoted area where Internet signals could not reach, especially the countries could not afford the establishment of related facilities.
However
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, I disagreed that paper media still are the main position of the source of news.
This
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 is because the speed of spreading
information
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 is much faster than the traditional rival.
For instance
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, when a car accident happens on the street, reporters could share
this
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 news immediately on the Internet and
this
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 report will read by millions in a
second
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. Thanks to the development of technology, by the usage of smartphone, computer and tablet, people could know what is going on at any time from the screens.
By contrast
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,
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newspaper
Suggestion
newspapers
 could be delaying the
information
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, people only receive the news one day or even several days after. In conclusion, it is essential that the existence of
newspaper
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 plays an important role for readers to receive news.
However
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, I believed that the invention of the Internet could bring people to the
next
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 level of the era of
information
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.
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