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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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parents
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Parents
 play a vital role in children's growing process; some individuals believe that it is appropriate methods for schools
to
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in
 teacher every young person to be a good
parent
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. I agree with the statement to be a good
parent
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 needs good communication skills and provide sufficient
time
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 to make them healthy. I will discuss how these each factor makes
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a good parent
parent
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.
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, Communication is most important skill for every
parent
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 or future
parent
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 school taught
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 skill that how to communicate with their children, when they doing wrong things you can carefully teach them and tell them it is not
good way
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a good way
, they
are doing
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are instead of talked
have instead of talked
are doing instead of talking
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 of talking harshly with their children. You are the main source for their children because children will follow their parents the way doing are or the way of
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behaving
 with others or even how they are nicely talk with others. Complete development of children depends on the parents, we all immature
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 or we come from the different cities or countries and everyone has own talking style so, school needs to teach
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 skill to young people to become a good
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 in
future
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the future
. School teach to be a good
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 how to take care of their children through providing good
nutrition
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nutritious
 food to make them healthier because most of
parents
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the parents
 are not much aware about healthy food.
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, for the working
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 school need to teach how they balance their professional or personal life because every children wants to take their
parent
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time
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 it
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 help to make them healthy but working
parent
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 are unable to give proper
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 to their children because of their busy life schedule and ultimately if effects on their relationships. In conclusion, being a
parent
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 the good communicating and spending
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good
time
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 with their children make them great person in the society.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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