You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and services. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter • Give details of your visit to the restaurant • Explain the reason for the celebration • Say what was good about the food and the service.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my feeling about service I got very satisfactory service from your
restaurant
on
last
weekend. Before I explain my experience, I can give some details information about my visit briefly. I visited your
restaurant
last
Saturday with my five friends at 5 pm. To celebrate one of my friend's "Jenny"
birthday
, we visited your
restaurant
. It was the first time to celebrated her
birthday
in New York so all my friends and I wanted to give Jenny special memories. As I know your
restaurant
is one of the famous Japanese restaurants in New York.
That is
why we went to your
restaurant
. The reason why I was strongly pleased with your service is that most staff are very friendly and welcoming us. Since we did not know which menu was perfect, one of the staff recommended some sushis and it was really tasty.
Besides
, we got a surprise
birthday
cake from your
restaurant
even though we did not order it. It was amazing and Jenny was touched. It was a successful
birthday
party. I want to say that I appreciate it. I will visit soon again. Thank you. Yours sincerely, Hwiju Jin.
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Try to organize your paragraphs better by dedicating the first one to the introductory elements, the second one to the details of your visit, the third one to the reason for celebration, and a separate one for what was good about the food and service.
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Make sure to use a variety of linking words to connect your sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
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Be specific in your praise or suggestions for improvement. For example, describe what made the sushi tasty or what specifically the staff did that was welcoming.
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Consider using more formal language and expressions in a letter of this nature to convey your message more precisely.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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