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Some people believe that children are given too much freetime. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 management is required to increase productivity in every area.
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 some people think children should be given more
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, others assert
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 should be used to do school
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.
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 essay will cover both opinions and explains why
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 should be utilized for school
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. There are many advantages to do school
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 in free
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. The
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 and major reason is better academic results. Practice makes a man perfect, in free
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, if students will do more practice of their subjects they will become proficient in it. Good results will boost the morale of the students.
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, students will become more confident. Another reason, students will learn to manage their
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 wisely.
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 management will increase their productivity and they will be able to participate in all parts of life. On another side, there are many benefits to give more free
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 to the children. The extra pressure on students can deteriorate the performance.
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, some students started ignoring the parents. Just to show off their study in the presence of parents due to pressure and in absence they do
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 which they like.
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 habit weakens the overall performance of students. Students should be given proper free
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 to do
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 as per their convenience.
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 will help the overall development and give flexibility to children to choose the correct career path. In conclusion,
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 should be managed properly. Students should have sufficient free
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, but the more
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 they should spend on studies.
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, they should
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 not pressurize for the studies.
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, proper balance is necessary.
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