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Some people think poverty is the reason behind most crimes. Do you agree or disagree?

More and more people are getting trapped in the vicious circle of committing crimes and it is thought by many people that poverty is the motivation behind
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 of
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 is one reason behind most unlawful acts,
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 of education and
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 abuse are
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 important reasons leading to crimes. It is undeniable that poverty has a serious impact on people’s lives, which can lead to breaking laws. People who are
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 of
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 do not own many assets nor have a stable source of income which result in them not be able to afford necessities
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 as food, clothes, etc.
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,
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 scarcity incites people to follow the wrong path to earn
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. As an example, lots of kids who come from poor neighbourhoods become offenders by stealing food from local grocery stores because they starve too often, and their family cannot afford food.
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,
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 of educational activities and
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 abuse
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 make a contribution to illegal acts. Proper education leads people to the right path in life. It is hard to distinguish right from wrong without it and criminality is given free rein to develop. Narcotic addiction is another common cause as it easily creates dependency, which is apparently extremely difficult to quit. As most drugs are very pricey and hard to obtain, people who are addicted spend great effort to gather
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 for
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 dealers. Often times people with average income cannot meet their addiction needs and
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 results in committing crimes to obtain the
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. In conclusion, poverty is one of the reasons behind the crimes.
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 of education and
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 addiction are
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 causes of wrongful acts.

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