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Internet crime is increasing rapidly as more and more people are using internet to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle this problem?

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The internet is the biggest breakthrough of the twentieth century, which changed the way we live and our perspective towards the world. Internet
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 changed the shopping experience by e-commerce, where everything is available on online. Today we can buy anything, anytime, anywhere by just one click.
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 revolutionised the way people shop, but because of the vast network and its vulnerability to hacking financial crimes is increased. How to deal with
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 problem? I'm going to discuss few ideas how to deal with it in
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 essay. Any buyer on the internet mostly uses credit or debit cards to buy a particular item. Hackers can steal their data and they can use them for their own purpose. Few days back, one of friend told me that his card details has been stolen and three hundred dollars draw from his account. He filed a complaint
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 the cyber security department about the incident. I'm keeping hearing these types of incidents frequently and sadly, these cases are skyrocketing every day. There are some measures that everyone should follow to avoid being a victim in
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 cyber crime. We should never share the card details, especially the pin and
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 code with anyone. Always check malware in your systems, so we can stop someone sneaking into your computer. Avoid saving the passwords of the bank sites in the computers or phones, even it is your personal computers. Check the legitimacy of the websites before you purchase something from them because some websites show cheap deals than the original market to attract people and steal their money. It's hard for any governments to stop
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 crime, but it is easy for the shoppers follow these rules to stop
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 crime.
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