You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people who can help renovate the building and also help with some activities. Write a letter to the principal of the school and say – How would you be able to help? – When and why would you do it? – Who will help you to do it?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I was one of the visitors to the

school

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last

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week. I had a great weekend and writing to let you know that

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school

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the school

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needs renovation and some

activities

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, willing to help my colleagues. I noticed that

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second

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the second

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building wall paintings are completely washed away and

physical

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the physical

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teacher will be on leave for

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the next

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two months. I am part of the Social Club of our company and we regularly

carry-out

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carry out

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some

activities

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to help in the community. With your

permission

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,permission

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it is a pleasure to help the

school

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and enrich our locality. On Saturdays, we can conduct some of the

activities

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for kids like games, sports and excursions. We will ensure to take care of the

activities

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planned by

trainee

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the trainee

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this

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day.

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, we can paint on Sundays where there won't be a

school

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and can avoid any potential damage to the kids. I Have already discussed with my club mates

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apply

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the above plan and are excited to

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itdo

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. We will make a detailed plan for the

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two months with volunteers and shall share

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it if

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you permit us. Awaiting

for

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apply

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your confirmation. Yours Sincerely, Sumanth

Submitted by sumanth depuri on Mon Aug 03 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

192 words

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