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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual and society. Do you agree or disagree.

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Youngsters are the
back bone
a central cohesive source of support and stability
backbone
 of the every country because they have energy not only physical or mentally as well. Half proportions of the society consider they should do some
voluntary
Suggestion
volunteer
 work to utilize their leisure time. I agree with
this
 statement which will help them and society in
future
Suggestion
the future
, will discuss in
upcoming paragraphs
Suggestion
the upcoming paragraphs
.
To begin
 with, they could do numerous of activities to make spare time to fruitful.
First
 and foremost, they can teach slum area children who cannot pay schools and
colleges
Suggestion
college
 fees because of financial condition. They can learn
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
, leadership and
also
 learn teaching skills which will help if they want to be professional teachers, they can understand their responsibilities
toward
Suggestion
to
 society and cannot indulge
into
Suggestion
in
 anti social activities.
Secondly
, they can grow trees
on
Suggestion
in
 public places which will help to environment cool and clean and surrounding green and help to reduce the level of pollution.
Moreover
, they can organize awareness programs to encourage others to do the same,
this
give
Suggestion
gives
 them
opportunity
Suggestion
the opportunity
an opportunity
 to interact with local folks and make strong social bond and improve communication skills. To conclude, it is just like
kill
Suggestion
killing
 two birds with one stone as it will help both the public and adolescents, so parents and teachers should encourage them to use their free time wisely.
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