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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative atibe impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree.

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In recent years, use of the social networking
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 considerably increasing.
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 many
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 think these
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 are affecting society and individuals negatively, others believe these are the best way to communicate.
This
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 why it has more advantages. In many ways, these
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society and individuals.
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, as these
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 work on the internet,
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,
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 can access
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 from anywhere and it is
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also
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. Through these, it becomes distinctly easy to communicate with friends or relatives, who are far away from you.
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, through these
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, I connected with my college friends, who are even in different countries.
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, on
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special occasions,
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 can greet others through messages. On the other side,
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 the incorrect usage of these
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,
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is affecting negatively both individuals and
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society.
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,
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 create fake profiles to perform
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criminal activities. Some
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 use these to publish illegal
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.
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, some
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 become addicted to these
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 and they spend more time on
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instead
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 of being productive. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh more than the disadvantages and surely
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 the detriments.
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, the drawbacks can be overcome by having some restrictions on the usage.

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Try to integrate examples that are more detailed and specific to better back up your main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitions between ideas to enhance the logical flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all points are equally developed throughout your essay, not just introducing them.
task achievement
The essay successfully addresses both sides of the argument, demonstrating a balanced viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, contributing to its organization.
coherence cohesion
You maintain a generally good structure that supports the argument logically, especially with the introduction and conclusion helping to frame the discussion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • loneliness
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • misinformation
  • public opinion
  • addiction
  • productivity
  • cyberbullying
  • emotional distress
  • privacy concerns
  • identity theft
  • data mining
  • networking opportunities
  • raising awareness
  • social issues
  • curated images
  • real-life social interaction
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