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Some believe that people will purchase a product based on their needs and advertising is not needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people feel today, marketing a
product
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 is not demanding an advertisement whenever
,
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,
if people want to shop, they buy a
product
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 leaning on their intention and inconsequence commercialism on
advertise
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advertising
 is being proximity
for
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to
 mass.
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 essay will support the issue by looking at agreement and disagreement of commercial attention.
First
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 and foremost, advertising is a key part of modern business and most companies need to tell customers about the quality of their new products and services.
Furthermore
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, advertisements inform us about the choices we have.
For instance
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, advertising is a creative industry
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by
 employing many people to make it clear to them which production is the best
choice
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.
On the other hand
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, it aims to persuade human by buying a
product
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wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 make them happier and
also
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 manipulates. According to another downside, advertisers focus on selling a brand image,
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result children
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result, children
 can easily be influenced by advertisements and they put the pressure on parents to buy them things.
Neverthenless
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Nevertheless
, advertising should be regulated and unhealthy foods should not be marketed in a way that
attracs
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attracts
attacks
 children, because it creates demand for
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product
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the product
a product
products
, in
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 case in some countries it is illegal to advertise cigarettes on television.
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, in my opinion,
advertiing
a public promotion of some product or service
adverting
advertising
 is a form of modern art and I agree advertising is necessary in free market economics, and is my appreciative
choice
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. All in all, I strongly agree, advertising is one of the huge part of marketing
choice
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 and people should never do shopping without advertising. Without advertising we would have less
choice
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 and would buy less quality
pruducts
commodities offered for sale
products
 and there would be higher
unemployement
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
 suitably.
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