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People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #customs #tradition
It is considered that following a traditional lifestyle and practice is an auspicious for those who begin their
life
, according to some. In my opinion, having
good understanding
Suggestion
a good understanding
 and communication are the two fundamental factors should have every family that are far more important than any other things. One of the main reason, why I think that traditional system no longer essential, especially, in
this
 modern world, as our surroundings are evolving every
second
 due to information exploitation and technological advancement. Practising outdated customs and cultural practises no longer required because these actions have any particular significance to the modern society,
instesd
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
this
 may project them as a part of an uncivilized society.
For instance
, practising Sathee, which was banned by British rulers approximately two centuries ago and it is illegal in India as well. Another point to consider is that mutual understanding and good rapport are the two
pillers
a fundamental principle or practice
pillars
poles
pillar
 of the new
life
.
This
 is because without these,
life
 cannot move forward. People from different
However
, adjusting others behaviours and beliefs can occur through good communication and learning family members' characteristics. Smaller adjustments,
for example
, eating habit, sleeping pattern and keeping things in a proper place. By doing
this
, happy and prosperous can be brought to those who enter a new
life
. In conclusion, some argue that following cultural practises and customs are essential for the beginning of a new
life but
Accept comma addition
life, but
 I, personally, consider there are other things need to be followed. If anyone lives
with
Suggestion
by
 principles and values can have a better
life
.
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