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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a
crime
 rate in any country has increased a lot and due to
this
 one should be behind the bars weather he/she has done bigger
crime
 or smaller
crime
. But according to some people thinking
instead
 of putting criminals in bars they should be made to do unpaid
community
 work. Let's discuss
this
.
Firstly
, In the 21st century in many countries the growth of
crime
 rate is getting higher and higher day by days and due to
this
 they are put behind the bars. But not all prisoners have done a big amount of
crime
 means, stealing a cash or wallet from someone is a
crime but
Accept comma addition
crime, but
instead
 of putting him/her behind the bars, a court should give should punishment of doing some
community
 work, thinking according to some people.
Secondly
, according to various report published by the government in a country gives a complete information that every now an
then
, means in every 5 minute a
crime
 is happening somewhere weather it is related to corruption, murder, stealing of some items from someone, or it could be anything and due to
this
 cases are happening in the court and
this
 cases takes lot of time to get solved. Yes, I agree that cases should happen and a criminal person should be put behind the bars, But for the ones who has done very simple
crime
 like stealing of things, beaten someone or it could be anything. A court should give a punishment of doing some unpaid
community
 task.
For example
, they should give a punishment of cleaning in the jail itself or painting or normal thing but in jail itself.
Lastly
, to conclude, according to my point of view I agree with the statement that certain prisoner or criminal should made to do unpaid
community
 work.
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