Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tells us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

There is no doubt that the number of commercials
have been increasing
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has been increasing
has increased
since the advent of the modern technologies. It is sometimes thought that these
adverts create
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adverts, create
an
artificail
contrived by art rather than nature
artificial
artificially
needs among the customers, while others say that
this
would help them to know more about the latest products available in the market. I, personally, agree the latters' viewpoint because
this
serve
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serves
the purpose of information.
First
and foremost point to consider here is that the business people can announce their products and services to the public by advertising the products. Eventually, more and more would aware about the item and
this
would increase their sales.
Additionally
,
this
would
assisst
give help or assistance; be of service
assist
them showcase
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them to showcase
how their service different from their
rivalaries
the act of competing as for profit or a prize
rivalries
.
For instance
, Samsung mobile, they have commercialised their products through various means; sponsoring crickets, Tv adverts and placing billboard.
As a result
, they can earn people's trust,
this
is all possible only
throgh
from beginning to end
through
the adverts.
Secondly
, nowadays consumers do not have plenty of time to spend
for
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in
searching for an
items
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item
.
Therefore
, reading a brochure or catalogue would reduce the shopping time and
this
time they can spend with their family.
Similarly
,
this
offers the best bargains in the market and people can find cheap and affordable things, for every pocket.
As a result
, they can choose the best available items without
waisting
any general reduction in vitality and strength of body and mind resulting from a debilitating chronic disease
wasting
waiting
hours and hours in
queue
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the queue
queues
.
For instance
, Mobile phones, each
cells
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cell
has manufactured
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have manufactured
with
different intention
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different intentions
a different intention
, which means some for clicking pictures, watching movies
,
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,
or playing games. The
avertisement
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
usually explains positives and
intention
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the intention
of
this products
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this product
these products
.
Therefore
, commercials are back bone of sales and purchase any newly
lauched
set up or found
launched
material. In conclusion, while some argue that adverts mislead the consumers, others think that
this
would help them to learn about products in the markets, and, I, support
this
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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