More and more people are becoming serious overweight. Some people think that a solution can be to increase the price of fattening food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a considerable number of people are gaining

weight

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significantly. It is thought by some that a surge in the cost of

food

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items that cause obesity, is the possible way to

takle

accept as a challenge

tackle

this

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problem. In my opinion, I consider that overweight issue of people can not be mitigated by

price increase

Suggestion

the price increase

price increases

of products because people's yearning for those

food

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products is difficult to control.

To begin

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, these days people enticed by junk fast

food

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and various other products that are responsible for

tremendous

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the tremendous weight gain

weight

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gain. Some people believe that rise in the price of these junk

food

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could dissuade people to buy these things but I disagree due to several reasons. People, who love to eat junk

food

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, purchase these

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food

Suggestion

foods

regardless of their cost.

For example

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, if someone is addicted to drink fizzy soft drink that contain high

sugar

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sugar, such

such

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as, Coke,

Suggestion

as Coke,

Pepsi and several others,

then

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person

Suggestion

a person

people

the person

could

not stop drinking of

Suggestion

not stop drinking

these drinks

evenafter

Suggestion

even after

surge

Suggestion

the surge

in their prices.

Moreover

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, these days, people are leading highly

paced extremely

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paced, extremely

busy life with

hectic schedule

Suggestion

a hectic schedule

hectic schedules

and they are having considerable less time to cook,

therefore

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, they love to order

food

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items from fast

food

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outlets that adversely affect their health.

For instance

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, due to shortage of time, people generally buy Pizza, Burger

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

, from

resturants

a building where people go to eat

restaurants

restaurant

restraints

and

this

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habit of regularly having these meals, has a

deterimental

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

detrimental

impact on physical and mental well being. In conclusion, people think that the price increase of obesity causing products, could effectively control

weight

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gain, but I believe that

this

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can not control the concerning issue of

weight

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gain. To tackle

this

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problem,

government

Suggestion

the government

should provide awareness about the harmful effects of some

food

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items on health.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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