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In many countries today,people in cities either live alone or in a small family units rather than in large extended family groups.Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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It is common knowledge that
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different people have
different way
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a different way
 of living.As some prefer to live in a nuclear
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family
families
 rather than having an extended
families
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family
.To some facts mentioned below it has more adverse sides as it affects both parents' and their children's attitude.
To begin
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childrens
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children's
 behaviour
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who grow in small families
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differs a lot comparing to those who live in a big family.
Initially
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parents have to
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 a babysitter as they have not enough time to deal with their son's or daughter's studies and posture
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That means they have to pay for the job of the
babysit which
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babysit, which
 could be done by grandpas or aunts.
However
 the role of the babysit in the child's life can nowhere be as that played by relatives or parents.
Consequently
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some bastard
habits namely
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habits, namely
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smoking
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drinking alcohol may seem as the boy who gets older in out of control atmosphere
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anyone may need to someone who they can trust and believe as everyone undergoes different sad and happy events in their lifetime.In
this
 kind of situations
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only family members and relatives are the only one who assist and support to solve problems.That's why family member may be always ready to listen one's
happines
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
 and sadness
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Most people consider having a dinner and conversation among many family member at home is the best event ever. To conc
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ude,choosing a small family may influe
nce defici
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
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enty to lead a life for a child or a parent's mannerism and behave in
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lifetimes
time
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