In some countries people's weight has significantly increased while their level of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest to solve this problem?

Food
culture
is varied
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varies
in different countries. There is
an
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a
substantially
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substantial
increase in weight of people in some regions. In
this
essay, I will discuss what the issue will be
cause
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the cause
and provide some solutions can improve
this
problem. Every country have their
food
culture, Some people always having high calorie cuisines.
For example
, deep fried chicken or chips.
This
is not healthy if people eating
these
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these foods
food
for a long period.
Additionally
, these kind of
food
are
also
harmful for our health.
For instance
, it is reported that these
food
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foods
usually contains
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usually contain
trans fats, a high amount of sugar and sodium. Our veins can be blocked if we
continuously eating
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are continuously eating
continuously eat
this
type of
food
which is contain
this
ingredients.
However
, there is some solutions can solve
this
issue. People should be encouraged to do sports.
For example
, governments can promote some video which is
encouraged
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encouraging
people
do
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to do
exercise is more healthy and keep our body in shape.
Moreover
, people
also
can change their dietary habits. The best example is
unhealthy snake
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an unhealthy snake
can be
change
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changed
to fruits or unsalted nuts, roasted chicken can
also
instead
of deep fried chicken. They can change the different way to cook.
This
will be significant
variety
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variation
and make
food
more healthier
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healthier
. In conclusion,
although
people's
wieght
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
become
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becomes
significantly
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significant
growth.
However
, I believe that there is some solutions can be improved by people concern their dietary habits and to do more exercise.
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