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It is better for younger people to get advice from older ones. Do you agree or disagree?

Unlike the old age, nowadays, young people can get enormous information and useful instruction from
computer
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the computer
-based internet searching and social media websites.
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, some people say that youngsters should turn to the internet-based web for information rather than a face to face personal consultation from older generations.
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, I agree with those who believe that youngsters should still ask for guidance from old aged colleagues or friends. I will discuss my view in
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 essay. Seeking opinions from older generations have many advantages.
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, senior citizens would have a considerable life experience, which learned from their own lives, as well as others.
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, they know how to deal with difficult circumstances, which made them the perfect resources for young people to explore with.
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, it is understandable that life would treat everyone, no different with endless obstacles, so it is true that the older you get and the wiser you are.
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, in most Asian countries, it is reasonable and expected to ask opinions from people with more senior positions for discussing, exchanging and debating the ideas.
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, people above certain ages would develop their own opinions through observation and studies, which is hard to see in young people. Admittedly, it is one school of thought that younger generations have their unique characteristics for success,
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 as open-minded, innovation, energy, prone to acceptance of new ideas and concepts. Even though, I still believe that it is beneficial and harmless to ask experienced people for more information and the guidance so that juniors would have been well thought through various opinions and considered other options before making their judgement. In conclusion,
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 young-age people are open-minded and have many potentials, it would be still wiser to take some pieces of suggestion from older citizens owning to their rich experience and problem-solving skills, provided that juniors should have their analytical skills.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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