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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Over the past few years, we have witnessed a massive rise in the number of cars in various parts, especially in city areas. Some people suggest that using a car is advantageous for an individual, while others believe that cars are harming our environment. In my opinion, people
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, people have invented various modes of transport to bring dynamism in fulfilling their duties.
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, public transportation in many countries, even in developed countries is not up to the mark; Resultantly, people have no exception to
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 their private car.
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, almost 80% of Indians
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 their private means to commute between their workplace and residence.
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, nowadays, mass people are quite exhausted by the terrible heat, which is the consequence of nothing but global warming.
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, a greenhouse gas,
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 as CO2, is mostly liable for
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 bitter experience that we are experiencing through the current decade.
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 increase in the number of factories and cars is creating numerous problems for us,
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 as polluted air and a smoky atmosphere.
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, it puts immense pressure on oil reserves.
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 the government encourages its citizens to
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 cars as
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, the city corporation of London is searching for an artificial source of eco-friendly energy to keep
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 capital city green. In conclusion, the government should adopt new policies to modernize the outdated public transportation.
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 mode as it is convenient and cost-effective for them, the residents.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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