Some people think that cooking is an important skill for young people to learn. Others believe that it is better for people to learn how to cook after they become adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
this
hectic life makes children and parents hard to prepare meals every day. It can be hard for the children to learn required to make a meal.
However
, I believe that the elderly should be taught how to cook at an early stage as opposed to waiting until adulthood. Many children have a keen in food, and should not rely on their parents until they become adults. Eventually, once they moved out of parents' house, they have to prepare their meals. It's a great idea because in
this
way, they can gain the knowledge about food, which nutrients should be absorbed and obtain an acknowledge how badly a junk food is. If children well educated about nourishment and preparing cuisine, they can be independent and will be able to prepare a healthy meal by themselves at the time when their parents are busy with work.
Hence
, to raise well-educated kids, the parents encourage them to learn about nourishment from at an early stage, it becomes a very beneficial thing for them.
On the other hand
, some insist that cooking can be a very dangerous place because of knifes and fire. These parents obsessed with children's academic records and want them to only focus on studying.
However in
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However, in
a long run it is sure that earning a well educated cooking skill is very useful than the result of the exam. While, if the kitchen can be a scary place with equipments and barbers, if the school activities responsible for and parents can be supervision of them, the kitchen will not be a disastrous place. To conclude, it’s clear that while the importance of study and the dangers of cooking shouldn’t be overlooked, they can both be managed and children should be able to develop their own independence and cooking skills.
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