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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

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this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter about a possible opportunity to be a social
events
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 organiser for our upcoming training programme in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK

Your article usage with the geographic name UK may be incorrect.

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. As you know, we will be leaving soon
to
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the UK for our training programme. I heard from one of my peers that the training organiser is looking for someone to be a social
events
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 organiser. I am very much interested in volunteering for that role as I have previous experience in conducting social
events
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
Although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I know that our head of the course is looking for participants, I do not have much information related to the role as it has not been officially posted
in
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on

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 our department website.
Therefore
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, could you please give us more information
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as qualification and availability so that I can verify if I am eligible or not
.
Change the punctuation
?

Consider using a question mark to signify that this sentence is a question.

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 As I mentioned earlier, I have some experience in that role at my previous school and I was responsible for conducting all the social activities
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as games, and cultural
events
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. I was
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 awarded a prize
in
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for

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 conducting the event successfully. I hope you consider my interest and I am looking
foward
Correct your spelling
forward

If you don’t want foward to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

to hearing a positive response. Yours Faithfully, Raghav

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Task Response
Ensure to directly address all parts of the task. You've expressed your interest and requested more information well, but to further improve, make your experience relevant by detailing how it can benefit the role specifically.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitional phrases between paragraphs to guide your reader through your letter smoothly. Phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to,' or 'Moreover,' can help link your ideas more coherently.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of sentence structures to demonstrate your language ability. While your letter is well-written, varying your sentence types further can enhance readability and demonstrate greater linguistic proficiency.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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