You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Manoj, How are you? It's been a very long time since I saw you. As you know I'm coming to the same place for my studies, we should enjoy and spend some valuable time like we used to in the past. The reason for
this
letter is to ask your help to find a part-time job there.
Firstly
, I took a Data management course at Algoma University. As data analysis has a very big impact on the present society, I thought it was the best course to do my master's. I got my term's schedule, and I have classes for only two days a week.
Moreover
, I'm planning to do a part-time job in my remaining days. I know it will help me to cover my financial expenses and to decrease some burden on my parents. I want to get some experience before I finish my studies, which might help me to understand people's culture.
Furthermore
, I applied for a few part-time jobs already but did not get any reply. As you have been living there for quite a long time, you will have some connections. If possible drop my resume at the nearest restaurants and stores. convey my best wishes to your parents. Looking forward to seeing you. Best Regards, Srinivas Varma.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses distinctly on a single idea. Your letter generally does this well, but there's room for clearer delineation between detailing your study plans and explaining your job search to strengthen coherence.
Task Achievement
For an improvement in task achievement, ensure that each part of the prompt is addressed fully. Your letter does a good job of this, mentioning your study plans, reason for seeking a part-time job, and asking for help. To enhance your response further, consider adding more detail about how your friend could assist beyond just submitting your resume, such as networking or advising on job-hunting strategies relevant to the local market.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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