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Some people think that to be successful you need to get in a university education whereas others say it is not true. Discuss both ideas and give your opinion.

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Higher education plays an essential role in leading one's
life
 better. Whereas others insist that people can have a better experience, even one is not well-educated.
This
 essay will elaborate on both perspectives equally and give my opinion later. As all would notice, when we try to recruit companies, proper education and certifications are required to resume.
For instance
, in Japan, those certifications take the lead on an evaluation of the recruiter.
Hence
, most high school students try to get into a sophisticated university to build a better
life
 path.
In addition
, a survey on how the percentage of students who have polished certification can get into a big firm was conducted by Tokyo University. It reveals that 90 percent of students joined in well-known companies.
On the other hand
, some insist that people who don't the certifications can spend a better
life
 like people who have it. People who acquire a superior lifestyle regardless of the certifications exist, and I have noticed those born under a lucky star from electronic articles.
For example
, in Japan, Mr. Horie has been running multiple companies, even he doesn't go to the well-educated university. From his quote, "I just graduated a high school as ordinary student, but I could be a successful business person. And I think an effortless is a key to become a famous or the rich."But it is undeniable that not everybody can have a preferable way of
life
 like those fortunate. All aforementioned points lead me to a firm conclusion that even if the famous business person could success in his
life
, it is hard to reach to his states, so I believe that people have to enrol in University to draw a dream
life
 on their path.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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