Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

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It is quite common that movie stars and sports persons gain more wealth than other employees in different fields. Most of the people believe that we are giving more importance to these individuals, so

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the reason, they pay too much.

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, some people think that other individuals

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treated the same way. In my opinion, I completely agree that entertainers are getting more than what they deserve.

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essay will describe both the views with the examples.

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, Nowadays, celebrities in different fields like movies, sports, television channels etc. Is gaining more popularity, so they are getting more pay.

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, In India most of the people worship cricket. The cricketers are treated like the God's. The Cricket Board is paying lots of cash in the form of wages and because of their popularity the Advertisement Companies are endorsing them in advertisement shoots. And they are spending too much money on them. To exemplify, a recent survey conducted in India in 2019, 75% people buy the product by seeing

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this advertisements

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, Some people arguing that there are some other important individuals in other fields, like doctors, Scientists, aeronautical engineers, biotechnology professionals

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writers and economists etc. Paid less. These people have been playing a vital role in the growth of any country.

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, in India, an average a government doctor gaining 70 thousand per month it is too less for them.

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the reason, the government takes some necessary steps to respect these individuals. During

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COVID19 pandemic, these so called entertainers done nothing to the society only the Frontline doctors, nurses, scientists and people from police department helping the entire world. So now it is the time to respect and treat them well. In conclusion, it is likely increasing entertainers gaining more money and popularity. Even though, some people feel that other important individuals

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paid more at the same time. I believe that

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trend will change in future.

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