some people think that sports are important, while others think that they are just leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some held a particular view about existence of sports, because it seems like just

leisure

activities. Whereas others insist that sports play a vital role in our lives. So both perspectives thoroughly elaborate with some reasons. Overall, I agree with the statement and some reasons follow later.

Firstly

, the argument in favour of sports being

leisure

activities would be that some sports are relatively less vigorous,

also

it is undeniable that sports could be a relaxing for people who are under a pressure from work. An activity which is less energy-consuming for individuals are climbing. People can be exposed fresh air with their friends, while going up to the top of a mountain which is a tremendous energy-wasting.

This

kind of activities are able to unwind, and keep up posted by their friends, just like other kinds of activities do too.

However

, I've noticed that the

leisure sport

Accept comma addition

leisure, sport

doesn't only play a role as

leisure

activities, they

also

definitely have a positive effect on our physical and mental, which makes us more significant in our daily life. Sedentary lifestyle takes its toll on our health.

For example

, obesity, nearsighted, autism, and neck problem are more and more popular. Some sports can help us handle these problems.

For example

, the players have to raise their head time to time during playing a badminton, which helps relax their stiff neck. And playing

such

strenuous sports can make the players more open-minded, which is very effective to tackle with mental problem

such

as isolated feeling. All aforementioned points lead me to a firm conclusion that different types of sports have different functions,

hence

some sports are considered as

leisure

activities because of easiness. So most of sports are playing a significant role in our daily life.

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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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National pride
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Socialization
Commercialization
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some people think that sports are important, while others think that they are just leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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