The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001
The given pie charts illustrate
us
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the data about the proportion of alteration that a special UK school spent in three years which were 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
, what stands out from the three charts
are
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that teacher
salaries
were the highest expense
while
insurances were the lowest in all three years.
Moreover
, the cost of insurance and furniture and other equipment increased,
although
other worker
salaries
and resources e.g. books declined slightly during the given years. When
looked
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at the graphs in detail,
rate
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the rate
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of teacher
salaries
made up approximately half of all the costs.
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Expenses
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Expense
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The expense
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of insurance increased from 2% to %8
in contrast
, resources fell
down
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between 1981 and 2001.
According to
the graphs
furniture
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the furniture
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and equipment ratio had
flactuately
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fluctuated
fluctuate
increasing
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that it reached
to
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a quarter of all costs in 2001. In 1981 other
worker
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workers
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salaries
account for
near
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a fourth of all spending,
however
,
this
plunged to 15 % in 2001.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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