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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that after a long working hours it is important to have a free time to recharge both mind and body.
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, these days leisure time has been minimised by
working population
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the working population
 to focus more on their
work
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 but in my opinion
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,
this
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 development has many repercussions.
First
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 and foremost, the working class of the society may lack the quality in their profession. Our body is not equipped to
work
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 continuously,
instead
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, it requires ample of rest before starting an another
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.
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, the late hours working and lack of sleep would cause some serious health issues, which, eventually, diminish the productivity and deteriorate the physical health.
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, some studies suggested that those who have been
maintaing
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
maintaining
 a balance between
work
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 and relaxation would perform better than others who do not. Another negative of
this
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 is that problems in family life. When a person spent a huge part of the day in his
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
, his time for both wife and children would be minimised. Due to
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, the communication between these significant figures may reduce, resulting in sprouting of some
marrital
of or relating to the state of marriage
marital
 issues.
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, it has been reported that one of the main reasons of broken marriages is the unavailability of partner, since they
work
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 lately.
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, children lack care and support from their parents, when they go through a critical period of life. In conclusion, even though some merits can be seen if anyone
work
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 out of his usual hours, the net outcome may have damaging effects
on his both
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on both his
 personal and professional
life
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lives
, according to my viewpoint.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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