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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping center or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The issue of shops had been in existence for many a couple of decades around the world. For those who are interested it is possible to surf the Internet or read articles discussing shops. There are points of view on
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 claim numerous shops closed down. An alternative belief regards that
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 is harmful and consider citizens prefer buy goods in big malls as the most important in that case.
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 make a conclusion. On the one hand, a number of researchers are showing that in recent years there have been some changes in shopping patterns. The trend id becoming more and more common. It does not matter whether one likes or not, the fact has to be recognized that in Spain the overwhelming majority of individuals do shopping in large shops
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 as Mercadona primarily because there are a lot of foods and things.
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, some local shops have closed.
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 completely or even avoid it.
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, the approach may cause a certain degree among professionals who believe the number of little shops decrease considerably from 500 shops to 50 shops in Spain. The government decided to regulate
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, it is necessary to take into account all the circumstances of each individual case. From my point of view, the previous opinion definitely makes sense, as it comes from my own experience. In general, it should not be forgotten that the attitude to
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