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Many Teenagers now have their own smartphone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion

#teenagers #smartphone
As technology and science improve every day, new
development
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developments
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 are constantly infiltrating our lives. Whether you are elderly or
teenager
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a teenager
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, everybody
have
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 their own mobile
phone
. In
this
 essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and give my own point of view. The main advantage is more convenience to
contact
 with someone. We use apps or
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smartphone
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 to
contact
 our friends wherever
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we
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you
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we
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 are, it is faster than before. Formerly, we can only
contact
 someone at home by
phone
.
For example
. if you have a
dating
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 with a friend and he is late. You can call him by mobile
phone
 and get to know if he is in trouble or just forget the meeting.
Additionally
, if you have any trouble or accident, you can call the ambulance or police for help immediately.
For instance
,
your
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if your
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 car is not working
suddently
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suddenly
 and
stop
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at
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 the middle of the
high way
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, you can call for
a
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help.
However
, there are
also
 many drawbacks.
This
 technology
make
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 people can easy to
contact
with
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apply
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each other, but
this
not
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does not
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 equal to easy
to
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communication.
This
 may
be cause
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be causing
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the
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apply
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distraction from communication with family. The best example is many children
are just
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only play games or apps
in
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on
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 their smartphone,
this
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which
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 make them
less
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 time to
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spend
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 with their family or talk with them. As a result, some children are more likely distant
their
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 parent and it cause
a indifferent and alienated relationships
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indifferent and alienated relationships
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
mobile
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the mobile
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phone
 is closely
interrated
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integrated
 with our life,
this
make
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makes
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us
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our
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 link with each other and keep
it
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in
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 touch easily.
However
, it can
also
 distract our communication,
therefore
, we should limit our leisure time to
utilize
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smartphone
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smartphones
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.
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