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Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era,
technology
 is flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues to interact with people.
However
, some people say that
this
 tremendous change in the ways of interaction cannot be completely regarded fruitful because of its disruption to face-to-face
communication
. From my point of view, I do not completely accord with it because
technology
such
 as
mobile phone
Suggestion
the mobile phone
 is indeed shortening the
distance
 between people.
First
 of all,
technology
 makes our
communication
 more comfortable and convenient. In regard to the successful development of
in-built
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
inbuilt
Inuit
 applications in
mobile phone
Suggestion
the mobile phone
mobile phones
 like Skype, Slack and video conference, people can
communication
Suggestion
communicate
 with their nears and dears anywhere and anytime.
For instance
, while comparing with taking several weeks or even a mouth for a
mail
a unit of length equal to 1,760 yards or 5,280 feet; exactly 1609.344 meters
mile
 to reach the destination in the old days, I can now simply get in touch with my friend in the United States by having a long
distance
 call. These advancements
have shorten
Suggestion
have shortened
 the far-away
distance
 between people.
Moreover
, it is undeniable fact that our social circles can be easily extended through the social-networking sites like Facebook and Instagram. Without
face-to-face meeting
Suggestion
a face-to-face meeting
, these networking sites allow us to meet new friends with same interests by joining groups and
forum
Suggestion
a forum
. At the same time, through sharing multimedia elements
such
 as videos and photos, we can share different point of views
in
Suggestion
on
 a hot
issues
Suggestion
issue
. With the help of mobile phones, the world has become a small village. The connections between people have become closer than before. In conclusion, even though some people may have different views on the advancement of
technology gadgets
Accept comma addition
technology, gadgets
such
 as mobile phone and opine that it has brought detrimental effects on social life. I strongly believe that
technology
 has facilitated our interaction and shorten our
distance
 in
communication
.
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