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Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #technologies #phones #interaction
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In
this
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 modern era,
technology
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 is flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues to interact with people.
However
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, some people say that
this
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 tremendous change in the ways of interaction cannot be completely regarded fruitful because of its disruption to face-to-face
communication
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. From my point of view, I do not completely accord with it because
technology
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such
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 as
mobile phone
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the mobile phone
 is indeed shortening the
distance
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 between people.
First
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 of all,
technology
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 makes our
communication
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 more comfortable and convenient. In regard to the successful development of
in-built
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
inbuilt
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 applications in
mobile phone
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the mobile phone
mobile phones
 like Skype, Slack and video conference, people can
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communication
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communicate
 with their nears and dears anywhere and anytime.
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, while comparing with taking several weeks or even a mouth for a
mail
a unit of length equal to 1,760 yards or 5,280 feet; exactly 1609.344 meters
mile
 to reach the destination in the old days, I can now simply get in touch with my friend in the United States by having a long
distance
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 call. These advancements
have shorten
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have shortened
 the far-away
distance
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 between people.
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, it is undeniable fact that our social circles can be easily extended through the social-networking sites like Facebook and Instagram. Without
face-to-face meeting
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a face-to-face meeting
, these networking sites allow us to meet new friends with same interests by joining groups and
forum
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a forum
. At the same time, through sharing multimedia elements
such
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 as videos and photos, we can share different point of views
in
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on
 a hot
issues
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issue
. With the help of mobile phones, the world has become a small village. The connections between people have become closer than before. In conclusion, even though some people may have different views on the advancement of
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technology gadgets
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technology, gadgets
such
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 as mobile phone and opine that it has brought detrimental effects on social life. I strongly believe that
technology
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 has facilitated our interaction and shorten our
distance
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 in
communication
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.
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