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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well others say that teachers only teach students academic subjects discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that, teachers should take responsibility of
children
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child
children's
 behavioural
develoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 as well
,
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,
whereas
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 think teachers are only
concentrate
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concentrating
 on teaching academic subjects like maths, science and
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
.I believe teachers should contribute to social
,
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,
moral
,
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,
behavioural and academic growth of their students
,
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,
inorder
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in order
 to make them better
humanbeing
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human being
 in all aspects of their life.
to
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To
 begin with whom those
thinks
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thinking
thst
pointing out something
that
teacher
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teachers
the teacher
 should
taught
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teach
 other stuffs as well with
academic part
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the academic part
 because
for
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of
 every
children
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child's
children's
school
 is
consider
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considered
 to be
second home
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a second home
 for learning.
where
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Where
 they spent
atleast
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at least
 6 to 8 active hours of
whole day
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the whole day
.
In
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At
During
this
 time they learn many valuable things
,
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which has a great influence on their lives.
Mant
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Many
time
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times
 it can be seen that in primary
school
 classes like nursery
,
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,
KG1 where focus of teaching is more on the social and behavioural skills rather than academic.
For instance
,
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,
in
early years
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the early years
 of
school
,
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,
children learn basic skills like sharing
,
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,
playing with friends
,
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,
speak in public
,
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,
pen holding soon.These kind of techniques results in the overall development of children
,
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,
which they can easily adapt in schools..
Therefore many
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Therefore, many
 believe that teachers play a significant role in the development of
student
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the student
students
a student
.
On the other hand
,
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,
many think that teachers should only concentrate on students academic parts.The main reason why many parents sending their children to
school
,
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,
because they want their children to be
masterize
an artist of consummate skill
masters
moisturized
 and better understanding of their respective subjects like
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
,
Accept space
,
maths
,
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,
science.These academic subjects are sometimes hard for parents to teach at home.Parents think that if teachers give their
school
 hours in other skills
,
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,
then
 it might be less time left to cover the academic parts.
Thus
,
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,
parents feel that teachers give
their all efforts
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all their efforts
 in teaching academic subjects. In conclusion
,
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,
in my opinion teaching is a very noble SUGGESTION
profession
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Profession
 and
professionand
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Profession and
Professionand
 teachers are not only responsible for
school
 studies
curriculum but
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curriculum, but
its
it is
it's
 equally bound to giving students other good values
,
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,
which helps them to become a respected person in the society.
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