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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent days, there are more and more people leave their homelands to reside in different countries. Despite the fact that moving freely among nations brings substantial advantages, freedom of movement can
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 cause some adverse effects. From my point of view, I agree with the idea that people should be allowed to immigrate to any countries, but the government has to provide some restrictions to
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 trend On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why the government should allow people to move between countries without any restriction.
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 of all, since everyone was born with freedom right, each individual has the right to choose their own nationality and their home to live in.
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, choosing the suitable country with a suitable environment to settle in can bring lots of opportunities which help people to fully develop their skills and
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 reach their endeavours.
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, if you want to get insights into the car industry, it would be a great choice to stay in Germany, or Japan. But if you are a fashion enthusiast, residing in Italy or France are the utmost choices.
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 of all, moving among nations is a factor to enhance cultural diversity. The more diverse the residents of a country are, the more cultural values they can share to enhance their awareness and knowledge of culture and tradition. Civilians can have direct understandings about different cultures and countries.
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, they can get to know other cultures without moving to other countries.
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, having the right to live in any countries can lead to a bad effect.
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 the overpopulation in some countries, while some are lack of residents. Moving to only the developed countries can result in the lack of lands, schools, and other facilities
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since, the basic human needs will not be met. Whereas in the developing countries, there is a loss of citizens which lead to the shortage of workers and ultimately cause financial crisis In conclusion,
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 free immigration brings some positive impacts to human life, there is one negative effect that needs to be considered before allowing people to move freely between different regions
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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