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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Having
money
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 is a necessity for our life,
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, most vital things for survival
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 be bought for free, but you can feel joy with many things other than your debit or credit cards, including but not limited to: health and family,
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 being healthy and supported by your parents and siblings all the time, gives you a comfortable feeling. Frankly speaking, most people think that
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 is the only way to be happy, despite having millions of dollars doesn’t guarantee good health for you, it gives you the opportunity to buy the medication and food you need,
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,
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 more example of the things that can be bought with
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 is the house, there are millions of homeless people all over the world, and nobody believes that those people are happy for sleeping out in the open, as well as that, travelling to different countries is
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 of the reasons that give you
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 awesome feelings.
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, there are various examples showing that
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 is not essential for us,
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 of these reasons is the family (e.g., parents, brothers, wife, and sons), because there is no doubt that losing
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 of your family members is an awful thing,
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, having your siblings by your side makes you feel happy all the time,
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, people who suffer from insomnia can be another clear model for
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 priceless things we
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 buy with our
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. To conclude,
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 of all people’s hopes is to be able to what they need, and nobody can say that having cash is useless,
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 words are meaningless, while, having the ability to but everything,
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 give you a precious moment to spend with your family,
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 but not least,
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can’t
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 let you sleep if you are not able to do that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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