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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and become a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Abortion is the most controversial issue having no grounds of agreement among two polar aspects. The argument is clear, though the concept of complication makes it difficult. Don’t believe in it really because its murder to an innocent soul, we are not the ones to decide whether
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 activity should live or die. It’s all about life or death matter, defined as not only killing
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, but yet removing or scratching parts of the mother's organs or damaging parts of the uterus to end a pregnancy. Overall, we are surrounded by many questions
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 as: is it forbidden? Does it commit a suicide? Does it cause a fatal fault for the uterus that might never have the chance of pregnancy again? Does it cause damage to sexual daily routine? Sadly, no one has ever given an answer, it’s always ignorant personal action without taking in consideration the consequences therefor sad outcome is always there. Having equal supporters on both sides. Yet those supporters have one goal in common: decreasing the number of abortions and making abortion safer.
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 are mainly recluse and selfish to follow a childish act or a mistake by just deciding to make abortion, mostly it happens with younger ages who follow their mistakes by making bigger mistakes.
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 are supporters, but in a good way, regarding old age or fatal problem to the child that may cause suffering of the parents or the infant themselves. Either or no human can have the heart or the courage to kill a heart. And it shouldn’t be legal unless supported by scientifically documents and proofs. According to the other part who is against it, it’s ok to follow
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 path, but sometimes it becomes a bit over reacted fast. As many studies and articles, advice in some specific cases to make abortion, and to be followed by studies and solid reasons yet sometimes people take their thoughts for granted and refuse to listen to others
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 as: Parent’s with cases like down a child or children with lack of capabilities that have the chance of suffering for the rest of their lives, but they think from the against point of view which take us to a doubt platform. In conclusion being with or against it’s a very big decision as well as hard to choose. Some points of view think that it should be the decision of the mother as the child is only connected to her and no one else can feel or diced
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 important move. Yet being very hard decision most probably
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