The efficient functioning of society is based on rules and laws. Society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that the community works well in an environment where there is a strict rules and regulations imposed on them.I strongly agree that, if the people were given a free will without any
limitations
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limitations, then
then
there would be a lot of issues faced by the law-abiding individuals of the society.
Firstly
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the law formed by the government to be followed by the citizens is to reduce the crime rate in the country.These illegal activities increased due to no strict punishment
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of
for
the crimes they indulged in
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which leads them not to fear to continue the same.
For instance
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the cases on behaving unethically on women is rising day by day in office due to the no proper code of conduct followed by
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these organisations
this organisation
.If these laws were not imposed among the
people
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people, then
then
there would be no fear in engaging
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in
these criminal activities and
thus
affecting the community.
On the other hand
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the act of giving more freedom to do anything they
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like
to do will make
human being
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the human being
to cross their boundaries without knowing the impact on the result of their action.
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if speed limit and installation of camera
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of
signals are not implemented in the roads
then
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people tends to drive rashly without any concern on pedestrians and
this
leads to
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a number
number
the number
of
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accidents
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countries which are underdeveloped which has
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a flexible judiciary system
to easily get rid of their illegal
activites
any specific behavior
activities
which makes them to continue their action without
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guilt
. In conclusion
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the number
of individuals turning
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this
creates threats to innocent
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peoples'
peoples
lives.So the jury and their punishment should be effective for the community to function properly without any impediment.
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