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success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success ? what makes a successful person.

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In today's materialistic world, it is commonly believed that prosperity and material possessions are the criteria of a achieved
life
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 essay will consider whether being prosperous really is the best indicator of achievement, or whether there are other factors which contribute to a
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 being accomplished. While many people consider that wealth is the sign of success,
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However I
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However, I
 strongly disagree with
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 viewpoint.
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 is because, Personally, being a achieved
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 means being happy in both personal and professional
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lives
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 while money is unable to bring true happiness to human
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 a
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 who lives in a luxury mansion, drive a pricey car, wear brand name clothes cannot guarantee that all of them are leading
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an
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. They might have a complicated conflict with their family member or suffer from their fatal illness.
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, it is obviously rich is not the indicated factor that
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person
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a person
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 would have a happy or successful
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. According to scientific study say that it comprises of many elements, including strong relationship, a good health and having a specific goal.These things enable to motivate a
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 reaching their
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 objective
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, a businessman with passionate for running a clean food restaurant, he has a specific goal to provide healthy options for customers. To ensure that he would success in his business, he must have support from their family, friends and customer.
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,
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 man must be in good health condition in order to deal with enormous barriers during his accomplished journey. In conclusion
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wealth is not the best measure of success, since a wealthy not guaranteed happiness in
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. In my opinion, to lead
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 people should place an importance on building relationships, cultivating healthy habits and identifying their real aim.

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