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Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Do you agree or disagree?

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According to some people most of the important things in
life
 do not have a price tag attached to them. I do not quite agree with
this
 idea. While I do admit that many important things in
life
 are actually free, there are
also
 many other things that can only be bought with money. Not every important thing in
life
 is free. People need financial resources to purchase basic necessities. These include food, shelter and clothes which cannot be bought without spending money.
Thus
, a person needs funds for their survival and to make both ends meet. Education is not free; neither is health care. Without these necessities it is impossible to lead a happy and content
life
. If you have a family you have to earn enough to support them. Actually, even the love between family members cannot be sustained if their basic necessities are not met. Obviously, there are many things that have to be bought. Of course, there are
also
 many things that come free of cost.
For example
, the love of parents is free. The joy and security that we get within the four walls of our home is free. Friendship is free. Sunlight and rain are free. All of these things are crucial to our existence and they come free of cost. In conclusion, certain things very important for our emotional well being are certainly free.
However
, there are many other things that only money can buy. In my opinion, it is important for everyone to earn enough to satisfy their physical and material needs. At the same time, it is
also
 important for us to find time to enjoy other blessings that came naturally to us.
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