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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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Consuming fast
food
 is found to be a common sight in every country as the price of these foods is low and abundantly available.
This
 is because people prefer to consume foods that are budget friendly and convenient to consume, rather forget the health issues and other ailments caused by intake of the junk
food
.
This
 essay will opine that a healthy diet is beneficial over consuming the unhealthy convenient foods. On the
one
 hand, quality
food
 always comes with a tag while people prefer to spend less money and
time
 on eating
,
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,
this
 is a result of the change in everyday lifestyle where the individuals have less
time
 to spend on cooking and eating.
This
 paved a way for the advancements in fast foods that are abundantly available and relatively cost effective over the traditional foods.
Although
 people overlook the mis benefits over the relative
time
 saving habits of eating speedily cooked foods, it is important,
one
 should understand and value the amount of health issues that these eating habits can bring in the long run of lifestyle.
On the other hand
, Consumption of convenience
food
 causes obesity
,
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,
fatigue and many more ailments,
For instance
, it is reported that
one
 in five people in the United States are the victims of junk
food
. Obesity is the major cause of cardiac attacks which eventually leads to loss of life. So, It's high
time
 to switch over to traditional healthy eating habits and avoid unhealthy convenience foods for a better lifestyle.
Further more traditional
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Furthermore, traditional
Furthermore traditional
food
 price rise is
also
one
 of the reason why many prefer junk
food
, so it is
also
 important to bring down the prices of healthy
food
 which can bring the changes more rapidly. To recapitulate, People tend to eat foods which are easily available and fast consumable, Ignoring the ill benefits of
this
 behaviour can only bring disease and no good for health.
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