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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education.

#nations #money #skills #work #university #education
Many people thought the government should prioritize vocational training rather than higher
education
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with that point of view due to
university
education
 holds
higher value
Suggestion
a higher value
 to contribute to the economy. Obtaining a bachelor’s
degree
 can be the key to opening opportunities for people who may not
otherwise
 have them. Many companies require candidates to process at least a
degree
 to consider them with someone else. Graduated from
university
 is still preferable because it is easier to verify one’s qualifications and background
education
.
University
education
 is
also
 beneficial. It is an individual to have easier entry into
the higher
Suggestion
the high
-paid positions and tend to be paid more than their colleges who do not have a
degree
.
Although
 pursuing higher
education
 is more
waste
Suggestion
a waste
 of time, expensive than manual work, it is the long-sighted approach that offers an expanded scope for advancement and a variety of opportunities to switch career paths. English lectures with a bachelor’s
degree
 teach in the
university
also
 work as a translator.
However
, a translator has excellent skills without a
degree
can not
can not
cannot
 train in the
university
. People who graduated from
university
 are
also
 an indicator of the higher quality of life for many people. Help them establish valuable social contacts that can expand their appreciation and understanding of art, history, and philosophy. In conclusion, Professional
education
 at the
university
 has many
benefit
Suggestion
benefits
 for the long-term. The government ought to continue to support higher
education
, even dark economic times.
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