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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Economic
development
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 has been cited as one of the most integral parts of both developed and less affluent countries to indicate a country’s power in the globe.
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, while it is argued that economic
progress
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 is an essential goal for a country, I am in favour of the equal role of other sectors. On the one hand, it is national economic growth that contributes to the decline in the unemployment rate.
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, economic
development
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 results from the gradual
development
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 of the predominant
drivers including
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drivers, including
 footwear, portable electric gadgets manufacture, textile and other key sectors. The non-stop
development
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 of these sectors will provide a plethora of available jobs for employers, which will decrease the number of unemployed blue-collar and white-collar workers in the world.
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, the low unemployment rate will create a prosperous society where the crime rate is controllable, which mirrors the most important goal of economic
progress
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.
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, the necessary role of other types of
progress
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 might not be overlooked.
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, it is extremely essential to form a country with a radical health care system to tackle any unexpected diseases. Take the
coronavirus
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carnivorous
 as a prime example,
this
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 disease is claiming thousands of lives in the globe, which requires a strong health care system to curb the spread of the virus.
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, science and technology should
also
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 be allocated adequate investments to ensure the exceptional growth in which cutting-edge technologies would be applied
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 not only mass productions, but
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 in user-friendly applications.
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, people's living standard and level of knowledge acquisition on hi-tech would be broadened considerably. In conclusion,
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 the importance of economic growth is extremely obvious to every country in the world, I strongly believe that other
progress
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 like health care system, advancements and breakthroughs in modern technology and science should be considered as equal as the
development
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 in the economic one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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