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Some modern artist receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
art
 plays a dispensable role in our lives; unfortunately,
however
, not all of those creating arts have been successful in what they produced. While it is suggested that governments’ efforts to tackle
this
 problem could be useless, others believe that there are convincing reasons why governments should take into account the difficulties that these artists confront. Personally, I would argue that governments should have responsibility in
this
 case for some certain aspects.
To begin
 with, it is clear that the artist still stands a legal position and is commonly accepted in the world.
Therefore
, it is utterly reasonable that governments should bring in relevant policies to save arts workers from the edge of unemployment.
In addition
,
art
 is beneficial for human community, particularly in terms of people’s mental health.
For instance
, a film maker which is obviously an artist, could create a movie in which there is a great deal of values of humanity with the aim of educating people in goodnesses. On top of that,
art
 has no limits in creation, so artists should be needed more in society. As the matter of fact, each individual in the
art
 world
own
Suggestion
owns
 different taste or perception of everything,
consequently
, generating unique
art
 masterpieces with separate classes of meaning.
Thus
, the fact that some artists earn a great deal of money, while others don’t could result in the shortage of
art
Suggestion
artistic
 diversity in our lives. If artists who have been struggling to survive are supported by governments, not only will
this
 better their living conditions, but
also
 give other people the opportunity to enjoy various
arts
Suggestion
art
 works so as to enrich their mental lives. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is time governments took action on helping poor artists for certain reasons. By motivating all of them, we expect to build a world where every taste of
art
 is noted to make people better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic disparity
  • Market demand
  • Public visibility
  • Artistic merit
  • Equitable distribution
  • Government intervention
  • Free market
  • Bureaucratic complications
  • Social and economic inequalities
  • Targeted government assistance
  • Wider reforms
  • Commercial viability
  • Niche audiences
  • Financial rewards
  • Systemic issues
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