The modern life is harmful for people as it brings a lot of pressure and reduces quality of relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, the world is developing, and

people

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have

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modern life than in the past.

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, some

people

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think that it is baneful because it brings a

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of pressure and the quality of relationships is

reducing

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others do

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I agree that

people

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do not get closer to each other, I disagree that

people

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may be

stressful

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. On the one hand, I agree that the quality of personal relationships now is decreasing.

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, Facebook, Instagram, and so on

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are the most popular social media in the world. They attract

people

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to use so that they only contact through those apps and do not want to hang out. If

people

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go to

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café or

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restaurant, they

don’t

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talk much, and use their phones

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People

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in the city

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have much free time to meet their friends or relatives because they work a

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to have money to raise their family families.

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, I disagree that modern life brings a

lot

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of pressure.

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there are many places to relax

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as cinemas, parks,…

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, there are robots to help

people

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to do the housework, to buy things,…

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, if you are too tired after a

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day, and you have to clean your house or feed your pets, a robot will help you.

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, the internet can give information to anything that

people

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don’t

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know, so they

don’t

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have to worry. In conclusion,

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modern life reduces the quality of relationships, I

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think that it brings a

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of pressure

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Improve the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph and point connects logically to the next.

task response

Ensure that you fully address the question prompt. Your essay does not fully respond to the question and lacks depth in some areas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

261 words

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